User talk:JW1996/sandbox

You've done well to use the information about FNL. Be more specific about the group, its purpose, and its founding. See if you can fill out the section on LU's purchase of Mead's and what has happened since that time. And you can also be more specific about the other buildings FNL has acquired as well as what they plan to do with them. What about the Holt-Ashwell house that burned? What about the Post Office/General store? Dr. Kabler's office? Include the archaeology and HSR reports in your sources. It will be interesting to see what you find once you expand the scope of this section. dddonald (talk) 00:53, 28 February 2018 (UTC)

Article is much improved from the first version. Continue to build the content with emphasis on what has happened and is happening to the buildings, especially Mead's Tavern. Remember to link out where you can. Rather than dividing this into subsections by building (that's happening elsewhere in the article), consider a different organizational scheme, perhaps just paragraphs or you could consider FNL and Liberty separately. You'll also need to make some corrections about the NL Methodist Church. Which of your sources said FNL did the improvements (roof, etc.)? I don't think that's accurate. How did they acquire the building? What are they doing with it now? Give more information about each of the structures. You don't have to give a full history, but you'll want to say something about the significance of each building. Do you have a source that says FNL plans to restore all these buildings to their original condition? Need to more clearly identify what you mean by "Mead's Tavern Report."

You're definitely on the right track. dddonald (talk) 14:25, 6 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
I enjoyed reading about the restoration progress however there is some suggestions I have to make it better. You could add some link to other pages with topics on your page. Also I would included some pictures of the actual restoration process. Do have any more information on the Holt-Ashwell house? I did enjoy the sources provided shows the information on the page. Cboyd 4 (talk) 17:08, 5 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
The content is excellent throughout the article. However, removal of any "personal contractions" such as "it's" should be modified to "it is". The only "major" changes that should be done for the article is to make the language a little bit more formal. An example of this would be to remove such words as "so" from the article and changing the wordplay a little bit. Keep up the good work! John McGrath (talk) 11:0, 6 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review - James Knight
Points of interest for alteration:

- I strongly suggest acquiring additional sources and/or content to provide greater clarity and quantity of material. Scrape the bottom of the barrel, as it were, for as much potential information as possible regarding the sections on the buildings themselves.

- For the churches specifically, try and find records regarding who led worship or who gave sermons if possible.

- For the tavern Specifically, attempt to implement a summary of the records of who owned it and how it was employed over the years. You can tie into a point I made in the 'Early History' section regarding the town's proximity to the crossroads of the wagon traffic-laden Great Wagon Road and Wilderness Road.

- For the Holt Ashwell House, hunt for records regarding its ownership and individual history.

- I recommend a more formal and varied literary style usage. (Ex., For the second sentence, I would recommend a different sentence structure than that of the one immediately before it. Try something along the lines of "For the sake of the structures of New London's historicity, the Friends of New London practice restoration and preservation.")

- Make sure to specifically tie the Friends of New London and your abbreviated term 'FNL.' — Preceding unsigned comment added by James D. Knight (talk • contribs) 17:14, 6 March 2018 (UTC)

Brendan Hamilton peer review
I think it would be a good idea to change the wording of the sentence talking about Liberty's purchase of Mead's Tavern to make it clear that the partnership was with Friends of New London. As it is, the wording could be a little confusing. Also the wording of the last sentence in the first paragraph is a little awkward. Maybe something like "archaeological surveys in and around the house have discovered a variety of artifacts including..." maybe mention a couple. this would also be a good place to put a picture or two of some artifacts whenever we get some of those. Last one. If possible, it might be a good idea to try to not use FNL so much in the last paragraph. Five times feels little repetitive in such a short paragraph. It might be possible to cut a couple out since the first line makes it clear its talking about friends of new london. just a thought. Good information, good summary. Just needs a little polish. Bhhamilton2 (talk) 02:06, 8 March 2018 (UTC)

MKMyrdal Peer Review
- One suggestion i might make is to examine the full page layout found in Prof. Donald's sandbox and think about how your section fits in with other sections.

- Another idea might be to link to additional readings on the New London website specifically. Also adding a reference of acknowledgement to Hurt and Proffitt might be fitting in this section.

Photo suggestions: I would say one photo would be sufficient. I would think a good picture of Liberty student touring or working on the property would be sufficient, but make sure we have permissions to use any photo we add. It would also probably be best if no faces were showing in the photo. — Preceding unsigned comment added by MKMyrdal (talk • contribs) 15:52, 8 March 2018 (UTC)

MKMyrdal (talk) 15:38, 8 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
I would recommend that you add an image of the Holt-Ashwell house with a caption about its restoration process. Another good image would be of the current archaeological research that has been started at Mead's Tavern. John McGrath (talk) 15:45, 8 March 2018 (UTC) Another good image would be of the African American Church building as you have mentioned that in your sandbox as well. John McGrath (talk) 15:49, 8 March 2018 (UTC)