User talk:Jackkennedy17/sandbox

I thought you chose good sources, and had a lot of good content in your draft. However, I think it would be beneficial for you to go more in depth in one particular area. This way rather than just having one study that provides evidence for each section, you would have numerous studies that you could then use in concordance with one another to draw a larger and more meaningful conclusion. Rather than just explaining the methods of the study you could then make more conclusive statements, and comment on the significance of these findings rather than just what they were. It is hard to draw a lot of conclusions when you are just looking at one study per section. However, if you do want to stick to editing several sections, I think it would beneficial to just find a few more sources, especially for the section on semantic processing. Overall though, I feel like your draft showed that you clearly understand the topic, and I think you have a pretty solid foundation for your final draft. I would also just work on formatting your citations into the text. Vewalke (talk) 14:57, 22 September 2016 (UTC)