User talk:Jackkirk18/Child actor

Jack, I think you've collected some useful information here. You just need to rephrase how you discuss this information. Right now, it reads like you're trying to make an argument. That's great if you're writing an analysis or an argumentative paper, but this is supposed to read like an encyclopedia entry, so the style should be informative and objective. Here's an example of how you might rephrase this (this is just one sentence; you should try to match a similar style throughout the entry and don't include statements of judgement like "this why it's difficult for child actors" or similar).

You write, "This brings me into my next point of Daniel Radcliffe and his struggles with alcohol abuse because of Harry Potter." The objective way to phrase that would be something like, "Daniel Radcliffe has discussed his struggles with alcohol in the popular press, which he relates in part to being a child actor."

In addition to rephrasing this to match the Wikipedia style, think about where you might want to put this section, as there are no other sections in the article that are about an individual film or show. Are you going to make a new subheading just for Harry Potter? Or do you want to incorporate what you have to say about Harry Potter into one of the current headings? Think about where it might fit.

Adovevie (talk) 23:14, 24 February 2021 (UTC)