User talk:Jackw8738/Fate/Grand Order/AsianN1nja509 Peer Review

Take out your opinions on the game. Like the phrase "I like very much". This way it makes it unbiased and informational.

You can take out "I spend a lot of money and time on it" because it's not about the game.

Capitalize the game titles and make sure the acronyms are clear for people to know what you are talking about.

You can split up the paragraph by subtitles so it is easier to read.