User talk:Jacob8598

'Main' links
Hi, I already reverted someone's idea that these were main links once, so before I do it again I'll explain why. A section contains a main link when the whole section is just a summary of the linked article. That means the linked article is effectively a subsection of the current article. Batesian mimicry ain't a subsection of Mimicry in vertebrates, as much Batesian mimicry - well, nearly all of it - is in insects. So please, don't edit on autopilot. Many thanks, Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:26, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

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Peer Review
General review-

Overall, I think this article provides an extensive and in depth overview of the topic. However, I do think being more concise might make it more engaging and easier to read; there seems to be an overwhelming amount of information for the reader. This being said, now having read the article, I definitely know a lot more about mimicry in vertebrates. Additionally, I appreciate the simplicity in the structure of your article.

In the introduction to the topic, I think it might prove useful for you to mention that mimicry in vertebrates can be divided into multiple categories based on certain factors. This will set the reader up with what to expect from the rest of the article.

Additionally, I think you should add a section on the different species of vertebrates that engage in this behavior because you mention it is rare. You could also maybe spend a sentence briefly describing the type of mimicry that each of the species engage in.

As for grammar, I think shortening your sentences would make them less confusing and in general, it would make the article flow better.

You rely very heavily on primary sources, rather than secondary and tertiary sources.

You should define defensive mimicry before getting into the different types, just as you did for aggressive and auto mimicry. Additionally, you should always cite definitions (the definitions for auto and aggressive mimicry aren't cited). You also use a direct quote (which I think should be avoided anyway), without citing (you are talking about slow lorises and the Cobra).

I also have a concern about the section on host-parasite mimicry. I think this warrants its own section rather than clubbing it under aggressive mimicry (especially based on the example of cuckoos that you provide). Additionally, I'm confused as to how mimicking a socially dominant member of the species falls under host-parasite mimicry.

In the "Evolution' section, I think it's important to mention what the unique selective pressures are for vertebrate mimicry. In general, I think this section is vague, including the title of the section. I wasn't sure what this was trying to convey and you have also ended the section on an awkward note. I think spending some time trying to fix this section could prove useful because it is a very interesting topic. You do a great job of explaining why mimicry is much rarer in vertebrates than in invertebrates. However, I think you make vertebrates the focus of this section.

Overall, I think you guys have done a great job! Hopefully these comments are helpful, and let me know if you have any questions. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Viditbhandarkar (talk • contribs) 03:10, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

Your draft article, Draft:Mimicry in vertebrates


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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. Phospheros (talk) 14:11, 24 April 2019 (UTC)