User talk:Jacobpurint/Judi Chamberlin/TRees68 Peer Review

This article has a good lead, it may be able to be shortened by a sentence if thats possible. The wikipedia article has a clear structure with headings that make sense. I like the summaries of the books she has written that you have drafted. I think it adds a unique perspective to the wikipedia article. In your summary of the book "Extraordinary People" I think you can talk about Judi Chamberlin's experiences without mentioning the first sentence of that specific summary. I would also recommend breaking up that material so that it fits into the already made headers in the wikipedia article. That way material doesn't get mixed up and can stay in a chronological order. For example the information about when she got married would be great to add in the Early Life section. I think you could also add headers about each of the books she's written and include those summaries from your draft. The Personal Life and Early Life headers could potentially be combined with the information. Good neutral content is cited. Good work you may just need to split up the information among the headers. TRees68 (talk) 23:33, 12 March 2020 (UTC)