User talk:Jaden2xU/sandbox

Eggsbendyboy (talk) 22:58, 25 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) What does the article (or section) do well? History, really good section that sets up for the subsequent discussion sections.
 * 2) What changes would you suggest overall? I think that somehow including other media besides just text would help break the article up. But overall very good content thus far definitely had me hooked. Maybe include possible employee benefits of "crunch" like the stock value soaring if a game is successful.
 * 3) What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I'd say relating crunch to just tech companies having employees work non-paid overtime in general could provide some context to why its so accepted
 * 4) Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? The organization and clarity of current section is very nice. I need to include chronological order of my sources to make the info make more sense to the reader. Also grouping the spouse section together made sense I need to make sure I keep similar topic together.

Going to echo the above, love the history, adds a lot of great information on the growth and evolution of Crunch in the gaming industry. As for a suggestion I had, it is actually related to the history, I think it would benefit from being a little more condensed. I.e. there is great information, but I think some would be better off in more specific sections. To me it seems like I'm almost reading an entire article on Crunch just from the history. Some other things I think would be nice to add are images, as well as maybe some specific medical cases of people suffering from the effects of Crunch. I'm gonna take a page from your book and make my history be a information rich section as well (currently mine is pretty bland and outdated). :) Stanleykywu (talk) 22:51, 25 October 2021 (UTC)