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The article titled "diseases of poverty" very factual, but it could use some more information and clarification. There are a lot of references, but they do not equal to the information found in the article. A lot of things could be added such as expansion of what diseases of poverty is and how all of these different factors affect these diseases and people in these communities. It would be a better article if the writer would have focused on quality over quantity and wrote more detailed and in depth about certain issues instead of trying to just write about all of them at one time. It's a huge distraction to me that there are so many different topics nut a short amount of actual information. To make this article better, I would add a lot more about certain topics such as asthma and parasites. This article is not neutral; it focuses heavily on poverty. I do not want to say it's one sided because the topic of poverty is important, but it does focus a lot on one side. The main topic (what diseases of poverty is) is very underrepresented as opposed to the rest of the article. When I click the links to the articles, some of them do not work and others are repetitions. However, the sources do support the claims in the article and are very relevant to the information. Not every fact in the article is associated with the references and I can tell some of the information is supported by opinions. In the talk page, there is someone talking about a possible addition about AIDS and the information is well supported by factual evidence and reliable sources. Someone also modified some of the citations to make them more reliable. Overall, this article doesn't seem to be rated very well because as soon as you click on the article, it says

Occupational Sexism
I chose the article named "Occupational Sexism" for my topic. This article contains information about the inequality between men and women in the work place. It has a section on gender roles (called the social role theory), wage discrimination and the number of deaths that happen while working. I can use these basic topics expressed in the article to expand on how sexism affects women in the workforce because of inequality and the favor of men in jobs. To add to this article, I can find more research about how women are not viewed as equal to men using numerical facts of unequal pay for women in the same jobs as men. I can expand on the death rates by researching exactly how many more women die in the work place than men in the world (not just the U.S.). I can also research more about gender roles in the work place and how that affects the treatment of women in their jobs. I really want to focus on how gender roles affect women growing up and how it follows them all the way into their adult life and in the work place. This topic is relevant to human rights because it shows how men are still viewed as inferior to men, even after women have gained the right to vote. This is a violation of many basic human rights that women should be entitled to. Some interesting information I found is that there is a National Women's Law Center, which is basically a center that brings awareness to the wage gap between men and women and there is also a day dedicated to this gap, which is named "Equal Pay Day". I also found an academic journal that includes a study of the examination of gender roles and how they affect the achievements that women have in the work place and the jobs that they choose. Another article I found includes information about sexism in general, explaining how it affects women from the day that they are born all the way into their adult life as a working citizen.

1. https://nwlc.org/issue/equal-pay-and-the-wage-gap/. 2. Unequal Pay for Women and Men: Evidence from the British Birth Cohort Studies By Heather Joshi, Pierella Paci. 3. http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1111/j.1471-6402.1987.tb00781.x 4. https://www.nytimes.com/2018/08/19/business/sexism-women-birthplace-workplace.html — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jaishawilson (talk • contribs) 04:47, 27 September 2018 (UTC)

Academic Journal Evaluation
Trotter, Robert J. "Sexism Is Depressing." Science News 108, no. 11 (September 13, 1975): 173-74.

This is a scientific journal written by Robert J. Trotter, a psychologist who evaluates the human mind. He has written a book called "Psychology: The Human Science" that covers different aspects of psychology. In this specific section, he is connecting depression to sexism. He says that "the highest rates of depression occur against women between the ages of 21 and 44" (173). Trotter gathered his information from a National Institute of Mental Health Survey and '''I believe it can be connected to occupational sexism because between the ages of 21 and 44, women are becoming well involved in their careers and are experiencing sexism much more frequently in the work place. This is a valid consideration when trying to figure out why more women are suffering from depression than men.''' Trotter also mentions a study that was conducted with children who were 5, 9, and 14 years old (kindergarten, fifth, and ninth graders) to test the presence of sexual stereotypes. It was discovered that regardless of race or social background, students portrayed stereotypical thoughts such as the woman being the babysitter and the man being the parent who constantly worked. It was later claimed that '''"schools are one socializing instrument which can immediately serve in the primary prevention of sexism" (174). If male students are taught to have a less stereotypical and sexist view of women, then that will lead to less stress on women in the long run as they grow into women.'''

Outline of Wikipedia section
"Emotional effects on women"

- I will be contributing to Occupational Sexism. I am adding a new section titled "Emotional effects on women"; it will contain information about how occupational sexism affects women emotionally, leading to higher rates of depression in women than men. - Information about gender roles is already included in the article, but I want to add a new section specifically about emotional distress of women caused by the social role theory in occupations - Main points I'm adding: 1. Women being viewed as inferior in occupations affect their mental health 2. Women are more likely to suffer from depression than men 3. Sexism affects women from a young age all the way into adulthood - Sources and main points 1. "Gender and Women's Mental Health." World Health Organization. June 24, 2013. Accessed October 17, 2018. http://www.who.int/mental_health/prevention/genderwomen/en/. "Gender specific risk factors for common mental disorders that disproportionately affect women include gender based violence, socioeconomic disadvantage, low income and income inequality, low or subordinate social status and rank and unremitting responsibility for the care of others" 2. “Depression in Women.” Metabolism, W.B. Saunders, 19 Apr. 2005, www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0026049505000363. "Epidemiological studies have shown that the lifetime prevalence of a major depressive disorder in women (21.3%) is almost twice that in men (12.7%)" 3. Connley, Courtney. "Report: The Sexism Women Experience as Kids Can Affect How Much They Earn as Adults." CNBC. August 24, 2018. Accessed October 17, 2018. https://www.cnbc.com/2018/08/23/the-sexism-women-face-as-kids-can-affect-what-they-earn-as-adults.html. "A woman's salary and labor force participation is heavily influenced by the sexism she encounters as a child and into adulthood".

History
The Social Role Theory has many effects on women, many of them pertaining to occupations. Before World War 2, women were usually found in the home, performing womanly duties such as cooking, cleaning, and taking care of children. These duties were based on the Social Role Theory because women were expected to do a certain kind of work. However, since World War 2, women have shifted the gender roles and have began perform the jobs that men would have typically been performing, such as joining the military, becoming mechanics, driving trucks, etc.

Trouble Advancing in Occupations
Women have been viewed as inferior to men as an effect of the Social Role Theory. In occupations, women rarely are awarded the managerial positions, this is caused by sexual roles within organizations. Men are superior in occupations because of the stereotype that they are stronger than women. This is a possible reason for why women have trouble obtaining positions in occupations that put them above men. This inequality also effects the pay that women receive and largely contributes to the wage gap between men and women.

Fights against the theory
The idea of gender roles has caused different reactions in women in modern society as well. Women have been fighting against gender roles and the stereotype that women can only perform certain duties in occupations. There is an entire feminist movement that focuses on the inequality of women in different aspects of society, including the treatment of women in occupations based on gender roles. Feminists have been working towards gaining an equality between men and women and eliminating the Social Role Theory to ensure women obtain basic human rights.

Stereotypes
Despite multiple acts attempting to seal the gap between women and men in the workplace, women are still deemed as inferior based on stereotypes embedded in society causes by the Social Role Theory. Whether it is consciously or subconsciously, there is discrimination of women based on gender-related stereotypes. It has been studied that removing stereotypes about women in occupations is difficult because despite training, people still acquire stereotypical thoughts.

Continuation of Sexism
Occupational sexism is caused by the Social Role Theory and stereotypes in society. Gender roles are prevalent in society and they go much further than the workplace.A study showed that women are affected by the social role theory from childhood and it follows them well into adulthood. This shows how the Social Role Theory is rooted into society and causes a continuation of sexism that follows women into their occupations.

Mental Health
Depression and mental health issues are also effects of the Social Role Theory. Women are found to be almost twice as depressed as men A possible explanation for the larger numbers of depression in women compared to men is gender roles from occupations having an effect on them emotionally. Women are becoming more depressed as a result of these stereotypical ideas against them.

Peer Review
DRAFT: History Before World War 2, women were usually found in the home, performing womanly duties such as cooking, cleaning, and taking care of children. However, since World War 2, women have shifted the gender roles and have began perform the jobs that men would have typically been performing, such as joining the military, becoming mechanics, driving trucks, etc.[1]

Trouble Advancing in Occupations Women have been viewed as inferior to men as an effect of the social role theory. In occupations, women rarely are awarded the managerial positions, simply because of sex roles within organizations[2]. This effects the pay that women receive and largely contributes to the wage gap between men and women.

Fights against the theory The idea of gender roles has caused different reactions in women in modern society as well. Women have been fighting against gender roles and the stereotype that women can only perform certain duties in occupations. There is an entire feminist movement that focuses on the inequality of women in different aspects of society, including the treatment of women in occupations based on gender roles.

Stereotypes Despite multiple acts attempting to seal the gap between women and men in the workplace, women are still deemed as inferior. Whether it is consciously or subconsciously, there is discrimination based on gender-related stereotypes. It has been studied that removing stereotypes about women in occupations is difficult because despite training, people still acquire stereotypical thoughts.[3]

Continuation of Sexism Occupational sexism can also go much further than the workplace. A study showed that women are effected by the social role theory from childhood and it follows them well into adulthood[4]. Sexism is general has also been found to affect the wage gap that has been created between men and women

Mental Health

Mental Health Depression and mental health issues are also effects of the social role theory. Women are found to be almost twice as depressed as men[5]

A possible explanation for the larger numbers of depression in women compared to men is gender roles from occupations having an effect on them emotionally. Women are becoming more depressed as a result of these stereotypical ideas against them.[6]

Aquilah's Peer Review

Identifies the Wikipedia entry you will be contributing to? This definitely clearly identifies the article by the clear outline of categories

Includes at least ten new main points of interest for the entry? This is good but you need to add six more pointAdaughte (talk) 22:47, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Appropriately orders/organizes the main points to be added? This article is very well organized and cited, but the last mental health point needs to be expanded a bitAdaughte (talk) 22:47, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Demonstrates an awareness of the format and audience of Wikipedia? Yes, This article is mostly unbiasedAdaughte (talk) 22:47, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Utilizes a diversity of reputable sources (at least six) for information?

Is written in a clear and concise manner relatively free of spelling and grammatical mistakes

Conveys the significance of this topic to the history of human rights You are almost there, you just need to tie in as a whole what this topic has to do with human rights Adaughte (talk) 22:47, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

--Niaeugene1 (talk) 23:03, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer review from Nia: Check source # 5 because I think there is a typo saying “World Halth” instead of Health

“women rarely are awarded the managerial positions, simply because of sex roles within organizations” Consider changing to women are rarely awarded managerial positions or the manager position.

“Before World War 2” Put II instead of 2 because Id think II is the formal/ proper way to write it.

“began perform the jobs “ Begun to perform / begun performing

“ A study showed that women are effected” Change to affected

“ Sexism is general” Did you mean in general?

Your contribution outline to the article is very clear and relevant to the article and would be a good addition to the article because it states facts and does not include opinions.Niaeugene1 (talk) 23:02, 1 November 2018 (UTC)niaeugene1

Social role theory effects on women
This will be a new section under social role theory, analyzing the effects of the social role theory on women.

History

Occupational sexism is caused by the social role theory and different stereotypes in society. The social role theory has many effects on women, many of them pertaining to occupations. Before World War II, women were usually found in the home, performing womanly duties such as cooking, cleaning, and taking care of children. However, since World War II, women have shifted the gender roles and have began performing the jobs that men would have typically been performing, such as joining the military, becoming mechanics, driving trucks, etc. The original occupations women participated in were based on the social role theory, but women have been attempting to counteract the theory by participating in jobs that would be seen as "unusual" for them.

Stereotypes

Despite multiple acts attempting to seal (w.c.) the gap between women and men in the workplace, women are still deemed as inferior based on stereotypes embedded in society causes by the social role theory. Whether it is consciously or subconsciously, there is discrimination of women based on gender related stereotypes. It has been studied by Tiina Likki, who is a part of a Behavioral Insights Team, that removing stereotypes about women in occupations is difficult because despite training, people still acquire stereotypical thoughts. Likki has been committed to improving gender inequality in the labor market; she continues to use her knowledge of sexism within occupations to make others aware of these underlying issues. Many stereotypes are embedded into our lives through society, which causes a constant continuation. This makes it difficult to steer away from these stereotypes as they have been prominent in society for hundreds of years.

Continuation of Sexism

Economists Kerwin Kofi Charles, Jonathan Guryan, and Jessica Pan have determined that where women choose to live and work determines the sexism that is encountered. . These economists used economic research and statistics to show that women are affected by the social role theory from childhood and it follows them well into adulthood. Women experience gender roles as children; they can be as young as five years ole in elementary school when they begin to be affected by the social role theory. Gender roles are rooted into society and causes a continuation of sexism that follows women into their occupations.

Trouble Advancing in Occupations In occupations, women rarely are awarded the managerial positions, this is caused by sexual roles within organizations. Men are viewed as superior in occupations because of the stereotype that they are stronger and more capable of dealing with their emotions than women. This is a possible reason for why women have trouble obtaining positions in occupations that put them above men. If women were to rise to a higher position in an occupation, there is a good chance that they will be treated differently than if a male were to do have that same position.

Mental Health

Depression and mental health issues are also effects of the social role theory. In general, women are found to be almost twice as depressed as men. A possible explanation for the larger numbers of depression in women compared to men is the Social Role Theory from occupations having an effect on them emotionally. Women are becoming more depressed as a result of these stereotypical ideas against them There is an intense amount of pressure placed on women when they encounter certain stereotypes and sexual roles in the workplace.

Fights against the theory

The idea of gender roles has caused different reactions in women in modern society as well. Women have been fighting against gender roles and the stereotype that women can only perform certain duties in occupations. There is an entire feminist movement that focuses on the inequality of women in different aspects of society, including the treatment of women in occupations based on gender roles. Feminists have been working towards gaining an equality between men and women and eliminating the social role theory to ensure women obtain and keep basic human rights.