User talk:Jake.peebles/sandbox

=Evaluations=

4/23/2018 Peer Evaluation by Jjher7030
Points: 40.5/40 Grade: 101% Spelling/Grammar Exceeds standard. Perfect spelling and grammar with a neutral narrative. Language Nearly meets standard. Contains some informal contractions. Organization Nearly meets standard. Information flows well but no header. Bibliography repeats itself in the content body and in the citation summary. Coding Exceeds standard. Perfect code. Validity Nearly meets standard. “Tons of jobs were being created” lacks a citation for that fact. Completion Exceeds standard. Complete. Relevance Exceeds standard. All ideas and information are relevant to the topic. Sources Exceeds standard. Solid and credible academic resources. Citations Exceeds standard. Present and in perfect format. References Exceeds standard. Updated and correct format. Wonderful job so far! Don’t forget that the citations create a bibliography for you so you don’t need to paste your sources in here, they show up twice.

5/4/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 17:38, 4 May 2019 (UTC) It's a bit rough, but it's interesting stuff.


 * Points: 34.5/40
 * Grade: 86.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Does not meet standard.
 * "...crucial to the up-rise of urbanization,..." This is an awkward phrase, and may be suggesting a chain of causality that is actually the reverse. Maybe replace with "...related to urbanization,..."
 * Same sentence: "...urbanization, and in turn modernization of the city." This seems awkward with the commas. Maybe just "...urbanization and modernization of the city."
 * These should not have apostrophes. They are plural, not possessive.
 * "...the 1750's and 1780's,..."
 * "... the early 1980’s,..."
 * "... early 1960's...in the early 2000's."
 * "...to one fifth of Brussels population." Here you do need an apostrophe, since Brussels is possessive of that population: "...Brussels' population."
 * "...As the trade economy along the waterways continued to grow, immigrants from..." You write this in the past tense. Did it end, or is it ongoing? If it ended, you should relate when it did so.

Language
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...took place sometime between the..." There might be a more encyclopedic way to be vague. ;-)
 * "...life around the canal expanded..." How does 'life' expand. Be a bit more precise with what you are saying. The same goes with the section title. It seems like you are talking about population and economic activity.
 * "...tons of jobs..." This is very informal. Use more formal language.
 * "...The surrounding area holds a sense of youth." Colorful, but not encyclopedic.

Organization
Does not meet standard. This is one very large paragraph with multiple topics, which can probably be split up for better readability.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...rapid industrialization that took place sometime between the 1750's and 1780's,..." I'm sure you mean the 1850s and 1850s. Even the United Kingdom (the first to industrialize) was not that early.

Completion
Exceeds standard. You really do have a lot of good, interesting text.

Relevance
Meets standard.

5/15/2018 Peer Evaluation by Jjher7030
Points: 37.5/40 Grade: 93.75%

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds standard. Perfect spelling and grammar with a mostly neutral narrative.

Language
Nearly meets standard. Contains some informal contractions and pronounced essay type-narrative

Organization
Does not meet standard. Information flows well but no headers, again. Paragraphs are arbitrarily grouped with little cohesion or connection. Information isn’t organized by date, it’s hard to understand how these topics connect or how they would end up in the same parts of the article.

Coding
Exceeds standard. Perfect code.

Validity
Meets standard. Stated facts are backed by relevant citations.

Completion
Meets standard. Complete.

Relevance
Does not meet standards. All of your paragraphs are separated by source and none of those sources validate or connect with each other. One paragraph should cite multiple different sources.

Summary
This looks pretty good but you still lack headers, which means I have no idea where I’m the article this fits. All of your sources are formatted separately and you never use them to validate facts or assertions from other sources. It shouldn’t go “paragraph1-source1, paragraph2-source2 etc”. One paragraph might cite sources 1,3, 8 and 10, while the next might reference 2,1,6,4 and 9. They don’t have to be in order, in fact cohesion of the paragraph is preferable over separating your sources. Just some advice for next time. Jjher7030 (talk) 03:00, 17 May 2019 (UTC)