User talk:James.Travaglini/sandbox

•	In lines: “As a result, he was functionally illiterate for all of his life. As a result of his illiteracy, he memorized scripts by having his wife read them to him.” By saying “as a result” twice, it sounds a little repetitive… maybe write: “As a result, he was functionally illiterate for all of his life. Therefore, he had to memorize his scripts by having his wife read them to him.” •	Possibly mention earlier in the article about Pedro being an inspiration to other Latino actors (like you did at the end), it’s powerful and should get more attention. •	Tell us more about what kind of negative stereotypes he was portraying for Hispanic men. What did people think, who thought it was offensive/negative the Hispanics? •	I like how you gave the dialog of Pedro and Marx, feels like we were there when it happened, great detail •	Who is Clifton Collins Jr? This is a little random, it’s just short sentence by its self, maybe put in beginning with his background, or add a little more detail. •	You have a lot of film and TV references, that’s great! •	Good job over all, I enjoyed it!

Pjplummer (talk) 15:31, 1 December 2014 (UTC)

Review
This looks really great! Not much critique needed. All I would do to this, is make sure all of your statements are backed up by citations. Also make sure that everything is succinct and not being repeated. Otherwise excellent work!

Clawson93 (talk) 19:21, 1 December 2014 (UTC)