User talk:Jameshu1/Husky Union Building

Hi, I'm starting to walk through articles and give everyone informal early feedback on how they're doing. You'll notice this is a little bit form-letter-ish but I hope it is still helpful!

I see you've made some changes and are starting to incorporate elements from our training, but there's still a ways to go with this article. If you're feeling stuck, please let me know how I can support you.

You don't need to mark an area as draft -- just work your additions right into the article text. Another area to improve as you revise is maintaining a "Neutral Point of View" about this topic. You'll find more ideas in this Wikipedia policy: WP:NPOV. The language sounds a little too much like an advertisement and not enough of an independent article. Part of the trouble is that you're pulling from a single source, and the organization's own website is in the business of making it sound good. There's more detail about this issue in this policy: [WP:OWNSITE] -- the site has a conflict of interest when it speaks about itself.

Kaylea Champion (talk) 06:34, 26 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi! I'm Miki. I finished the peer-review. Here's the link: Mikin83 (talk) 21:58, 27 January 2022 (UTC).

Hi Jameshu1, I have reviewed your draft. Overall you did a great job and I think there's some room that needs to be improved. Here's the link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jameshu1/Husky_Union_Building/Angelita_Cecilia_Peer_Review — Preceding unsigned comment added by Angelita Cecilia (talk • contribs) 06:12, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I just added some peer review notes in your draft. I hope that my suggestions may help a little! Overall, great job and I am looking forward to see the final draft! Steph.tsaii (talk) 09:25, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi

You are approved to go live. This looks great -- almost 2 quality classes in improvement!

As a reminder, here are our go-live steps:


 * 1) Final read-through draft.
 * 2) Check live article for changes. [History Tab]
 * 3) Two browsers side by side, if you can. Code mode, not visual editor.
 * 4) Paragraph by paragraph copy, leaving behind an explanatory edit summary after each chunk of changes.
 * 5) Note on article talk page.
 * 6) Note at the top of your sandbox version.
 * 7) Celebrate!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 00:17, 8 February 2022 (UTC)