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Evaluation of Ansley J. Coale Article
One major critique that needs to be addressed in the article is that some of the facts are copied exactly from certain articles such as one listed in the Princeton bibliography listed below.[1] Their were several instances where there were no quotations used or source listed after a statement. Another section that could be added separately could talk about Coale's three preconditions for fertility decline more in depth. There could be another section talking about his life at Princeton. The bibliography written by Van de Kaa goes into more of his studies at his university including interesting facts about how he studied modern European history and English.[2] One of Coale's major works which was also coedited by Susan Watkins that did not get much attention in the article was there work on the Decline In Fertility in Europe. Ansley Coale and his collaborators came up with a set of independent indexes so that births, deaths, and marriage would not have to be tracked continuously.[3] There could be a separate section added just on the Decline in Fertility in Europe article.  I really like a lot of these suggestions and look forward to seeing your additions to the article - Prof H 

Bibliography:
[1] "Emeritus professor Ansley Coale dies". Princeton University. Retrieved 2018-03-14.

[2] van de Kaa, Dirk J. (2004). "["Ready, Willing, and Able": Ansley J. Coale, 1917-2002]". The Journal of Interdisciplinary History. 34 (3): 509–511.

[3] Andorka, Rudolf; Levine, David; Tilly, Charles (1986). "Review of The Decline of Fertility in Europe". Population and Development Review. 12 (2): 323–340. doi:10.2307/1973115. Jamesshe18 (talk) 02:38, 14 March 2018 (UTC)

JOrtz Peer Review 4/10
Early Childhood and Education Ansley Coale was the youngest of three children born from Nellie and James Coale. One year after he was born, his family moved to Cleveland, Ohio where he spent most of his early years receiving an "excellent" education.[1] It was not until 1928 when the Coale family moved to Annapolis, Maryland. Ansley Coale attended a public high school starting in 1930. His intentions were to enroll in Princeton University just like his older brother Jim did in 1933. By the time Ansley was 16 years old, he was ready to graduate high school. After an extra year at the Mercersburg Academy, a preparatory school, he was accepted into Princeton. This extra year of education was not only important for his intellectual development, but he ended up having 18 companions from the academy that also went to Princeton.[1]. After he obtained his Bachelor's of Arts (BA) and Master's degree in economics, Ansley Coale was offered a generous fellowship by the director of the Office of Population Research, Frank Notestein, as long as demography was a field of study. Over the years the two of them became well-known demographers.[1] Six years after he received his Master's degree, Ansley Coale furthered his education by obtaining his Ph.D. in 1947.[2]

1. I liked your article section, everything was very well put together!

2. You could possibly elaborate on why you put excellent in quotation marks in the second sentence.

3. Ansley Coale attended a public high school starting in 1930. -In this sentence I would change the wording to "Ansley Coale attended a public high school in the year of 1930."

4. After he obtained his Bachelor's of Arts (BA) and Master's degree in economics, Ansley Coale was offered a generous fellowship by the director of the Office of Population Research, Frank Notestein, as long as demography was a field of study. - Remove the space after economics and before the comma. Maybe remove the last part "as long as demography was a field of study" and make that into a new sentence. For example, "As long as demography was a field of study he would continue his job with Frank." Something a long those lines.

5. Everything else is looking good! You did a very descriptive article section!

Peer Review
· I think that this section added to this article was really great and does not need any improvements that I can find. · One great thing I saw in this article was that it flowed very well. All the sentences made sense and the sentence structures are easy to follow. · The added section to this article was overall really great! I feel like this is a great elaboration to the original article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by ArianaDelgadillo22 (talk • contribs) 04:53, 12 April 2018 (UTC)