User talk:Jamieowens/sandbox

Jamie Owens Peer review
The unbiased tone used in the article is well maintained and focuses on relaying the facts. Phrasing that the poet belongs to the Muscogee nation. Rephrasing the section about where she is based and how she belongs to the Muscogee nation, the way it is currently written it makes it seem like the poet is doing something out of the ordinary by living in a different state than that of her with the Muscogee nation. Consider revising the use of so many commas and expanding the information into detailed sentences. The information of activities outside of publication is a good way to understand the poet as a person aside from their written work and would be a good application to my own article. Serena1627 (talk) 01:06, 11 October 2018 (UTC) Serena Harris
 * I think that rephrasing the section regarding the Muscogee Nation would help. I did not realize that it read as if she was doing something "out of the ordinary," thanks for pointing that out! I have edited the article to include more information on the activities outside of publication and will go back and pay closer attention to my use of commas. Thank you for your feedback! Jamieowens (talk) 14:12, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

Jamie Owens' Peer Review
Good job on organizing the content on this article. The article draft on the author is written very well. It is unbiased, which is a great thing to have when writing a wikipedia article. Everything in the article is relevant to the topic. There are some viewpoints that could be described more in detail, for example where you mention about the fellowship experiences that the author has gone through, share what kind of experiences. The citation links work fine and the sources do support the information written in the article. One thing that I would like is for the sources to be able to have a link to them, so it would be easier for the reader to open them easily. VBenz (talk) 10:21, 10 October 2018 (UTC)
 * I think that expanding on the fellowship experiences of the poet would be beneficial. I have gone back and added this information to the article. I have also added information regarding the poet's philanthropic activities, to expand on these outside experiences. I will look into adding the link to the sources. I appreciated your feedback! Jamieowens (talk) 14:16, 16 October 2018 (UTC)