User talk:Jamiesung6/sandbox

Your sources look promising! I look forward to seeing this article develop! It would be helpful to have a short and basic run-down of where you see this article going (see your colleagues talk pages for examples) Thea365Instructor (talk) 16:35, 26 April 2018 (UTC)

Zapcat (talk) 18:25, 17 May 2018 (UTC)Zoe Peer Review
Zapcat (talk) 18:25, 17 May 2018 (UTC)The article is written clearly and is easy to navigate and understand. The only suggestion I would make is to try and include the years for his work, especially what he has written and performed in. Also what year did he graduate from Iowa? The inclusion of dates would help position him and his work into a timeline. One grammar suggestion :in the section on 'Where Did We Sit on the Bus?", you say "causing him to get surrounded by white friends", changing 'get' to 'be' would create a better flow in the sentence. Maybe try to include a small bit on the public reaction to "Where Did We Sit on the Bus?" to explain why this particular play was so popular.