User talk:Janeha/sandbox

Marley Hughes
""What went well""
 * Good explanation of the theories related to this topic

""Areas to improve""


 * Definitely needs an image outlining the brain pathways of speech perception, as well as links to other wikipedia articles. To do this you would just double bracket the word you want to link. Example brain.
 * Any criticisms of theories could be outlined
 * Add any directions for future research.
 * It is necessary to link speech perception back to cognitive science as a whole, or how it fits into the topic of cognitive science.
 * perhaps a brief history section of the topic may have helped to enhance the visual appeal of the page.

" More importantly, this new conceptualization advances the interdisciplinary approach to auditory perception in the area of cognitive science." - explain how this this advances the area of cognitive science.

What I liked:

I thought you did a great job! I liked your section titles. You did a great job organizing your title! It was also very well-referenced so it seemed like you put a lot of work into it. I also liked how you gave lots of examples throughout your article. Good work!

Improvements:

Space between "signal space" and "(e.g.,)" "Overview" section: "depends" not "depend" as written ;should say "The left hemisphere" not "Left hemisphere" as written "Biological Perspective" section: "human nervous system are not organized..." It should say "is", as in "human nervous system is not organized" "Theories of Speech Perception" section: should be "divided" not "divided" as written "Acoustic Approach" section: "specialize" not "specializes" as written; "non-speech" not "nonspeech" as written; take out "EXPLAIN" "The acoustic based theories argue the dominant importance of the acoustics in speech perception" I would reword this sentence so it's more clear like "The acoustic based theories argue that acoustics are of dominant importance in speech perception."

"A strong proponent of acoustic based theories would argue that listening to speech is processed in a way in which specialized speech mechanisms are used to perceive speech, whereas, a weak proponent would suggest that listening to speech engages in previous knowledge of language, thus context based, and more experience based approach" I would shorten that sentence to make it more clear to the reader.

"Although there is lack of invariance in human's speech, the listener can quickly process and understand these enormous variances" I don’t understand what you mean by that sentence

I have looked up the following works on Wikipedia and seen that you can hyperlink them to existing articles: phonemes, voice onset time, formants, auditory cortex, segmentation problem, Mcgurk effect & coarticulation. It would be a good idea for you to do this in order to connect your article to others articles so the reader can quickly access unknown information.

I would include at least one diagram in your article because it helps keep the reader's attention/explains your topic better. Some ideas could be to include a diagram showing the hierarchal organization of speech like you talked about in your overview, including a spectrogram diagram showing /da/ and /ga/ sounds like you talked about in your example, or including a diagram of the auditory cortex with the labelled hemispheres.

I found some parts a bit hard to follow. It would be a good idea to break some of your sections into paragraphs. I would break up the overview, the acoustic approach, and motor theory sections into paragraphs because they are your longest sections.

Another idea would be to have a concluding type section like "Future work" or "See also" and then have a bulleted list.

Edited by Denisa Luta Gizmeister1 (talk) 19:19, 3 April 2013 (UTC)