User talk:JanelleNDri/Baoulé people

Peer Review Paragraph- Kami P
I think this is a really fascinating article and I was very interested to learn about this culture especially because I wasn't very aware of it beforehand. I do think that since you are still in the starting stages of making edits there is a lot of potential and so far from reading your re-write of the intro, I think this will turn out to be really nice. I would say the biggest "issue" of the overall piece is that it feels very sporadic and a little random at times. I think some of the information is either not necessary or could be put together with another part to make it a little easier to read. I understand that because this culture is so diverse and so intricate it can feel like you have to put every information in (I know you didn't actually put all of this in and it was already there) but I think focusing in on making the overall piece more concise will benefit it greatly. When people go to Wikipedia they want the information but not if it's over-bearing. I made some suggestions in my peer review about what sections I think you could put together to make it an easier read. I also noted for the stuff you fixed in the intro that the starting sentence is really great. It makes your point of what you're talking about very clear and it gets straight to the point which I think is very good. The end of this paragraph trails off a little bit so I definitely think you can make this stronger. For the rest of the piece and parts you didn't get to, I made some notes of what I think would be helpful to see in these later sections and I hope those help a little with what direction I think would be good to go in! Overall, based on what you wrote, I think you have a really great article and once you get a little further into it, if you treat the rest of the article how you did the first paragraph, will make it 100x's better and easier to read overall. Kpetrosillo (talk) 17:43, 23 March 2023 (UTC)


 * I'm glad that @Kpetrosillo wrote this summary, which I think is very helpful. One of the issues here is that you didn't find a lot of sources yet. I did find the site for the brochure you linked in your bibliography sandbox: https://nalrc.indiana.edu/resources/brochures.html so you could use that. The talk page for the article also mentions that the article lacks a "history" section, so maybe that is something you could work on as well. Consider checking out similar articles on Ethnic groups to get ideas for the type of content, sources, etc. that are typical in these kinds of articles (examples: Bono people; Akan people; Anyi people, etc.) KGS8TH (talk) 16:26, 27 March 2023 (UTC)