User talk:Jaredbawner/sandbox

Your Wikipedia article is on Commercial Policy. Is that correct? You might consider defining it. I also find it helpful to point to what is not commercial policy. You might mention what types of Commercial Policy exist and give examples. The article could also discuss the strengths and weaknesses of each type. It's fine to city Encyclopedia Britannica but what about some actual articles on the topic? Cassell04 (talk) 13:54, 10 October 2018 (UTC)

Doug Girard's peer review 10/12/18
I like that there are different headings for sections in your draft. Breaking down what tariffs and important quotas are is important. Try adding in a introduction that defines commercial policy and use more examples as different headings. The article is neutral which is good. Just needs to give more background knowledge to the reader. You should pretend that the reader doesn't know anything about the subject. DougGirard19 (talk) 23:15, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
This piece has great content and is very interesting. I think it would benefit you to start to make it into the Wikipedia format, as you may already know. Use different headings instead of bullet points and your contribution will come together quite nicely. I also think you should change "things that affect commercial policy to "Ways commercial policy may be affected" to make it sound more official. Overall great content and will be a nice piece after you format it. Rstewa28 (talk) 01:21, 21 October 2018 (UTC)