User talk:JasmineGraves/sandbox

Your article is off to a really good start. Some of the language in the article (ie. "predominantly been regarding") is a bit fluffy and could be cut down to be more succinct (ie. "has focused on"). There are also a few punctuation that don't necessarily need to be there. All those can be fixed during proofreading and grammar/mechanics editing. Really good job! Tr5689872 (talk) 17:43, 25 April 2018 (UTC)

Zoë's Peer Review
Really great organization so far. I enjoy how it proceeds chronologically. The detail so far is also fantastic! As you mention “Double Jeopardy: To Be Black and Female” as her most widely known piece of work, I think it would be nice for the reader if there was more elaboration on the piece and its importance. Overall, very easy to follow! Great job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zoerobinson3 (talk • contribs) 01:18, 30 April 2018 (UTC)

Drea's Peer Review- The Wikipedia article about Frances M. Beal is well composed and directly relates to the course, as it deals with a prominent Black feminist. Based upon the tittle and content, it is clear to reader that the article is about Beal. The organization indicates connections, as the most important aspects of Beal's life are placed in a sensible order. I would suggest that other works by this figure be included in the article (below). The tone and flow of the article are encylopedic, focusing on delivering vital information.
 * Spelling & Grammar suggestions: Sentence regarding her mother and father could be broken down as it appears kind of wordy. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dtoler11 (talk • contribs) 02:55, 30 April 2018 (UTC)