User talk:Jasminecory/sandbox

Hi, it is a good topic. I think you could add Introductory sentence, as it is important to the reader, so the reader can know the big idea of the article through that sentence. You have to use capital letters at the beginning of a sentence, because in your draft, there are a couple of sentence that start not with capital letter. And also you could add some paraphrase from your reference to the draft you are working with, to add some confirmation on things that you are talking about. Lastly, I know it is a draft but it would be great if you can start organizing the article, for example, separate the heading from the sub heading, or differentiate the sub heading with the content of it. Thank you

Hi your over review found her https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Pollyjoke on my talk page. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pollyjoke (talk • contribs) 17:39, 29 November 2021 (UTC)