User talk:Jasmingarduno/sandbox

The article did a good job providing background information which lead to their main thesis. It explained how the environment plays a critical role in a child’s learning abilities. Also explained that social support is a main contributing factor but then explained that with technology, the need of that support is not needed. “children that are exposed to media like tablets or computers can help them learn more vocabulary without social support” The last paragraph on Television is written exceptionally well. This paragraph was able to discuss how tablets and computers enrich a child’s vocabulary and encourage conversation between peers in an organized and effective manner. I would add another example of why technology is effective in enhancing their learning abilities. Providing which ages are best to use those technology based devices to help their learning abilities.The Media Assisted Learning section has several sentences in the beginning that I feel should be changed as they feel as if they are run-off sentences and could be conjoined into one. There are also a few sentences that also just sound a bit weird to read, as well as being very vague, could be grammar issues? I feel that it needs to have greater detail by maybe adding more factual statements or supporting knowledge alongside. The most important would probably be to lengthen the introduction “Language Acquisition and Technology”. A good introduction always captures a reader's attention and sets up the stage for the rest of the article. After reviewing our article and comparing it to The use of Electronic's sandbox, our article is a little more difficult to read and understand. Since we discuss various articles I think it is important to review our word order and remember the main goal is to make it easier for a reader to understand our topic.