User talk:Jasonkung22

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Hello, Jasonkung22, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Response
Hi, I have some feedback for you:

You rely very heavily on studies as sources. Studies should generally be avoided unless they're accompanied with a secondary source that reviews the study or comments upon the specific claim that is being stated. The reason for this is that studies are primary sources for any of the claims and research conducted by their authors. The publishers don't provide any commentary or in-depth verification, as they only check to ensure that the study doesn't have any glaring errors that would invalidate it immediately. Study findings also tend to be only true for the specific people or subjects that were studied. For example, a child in one area may respond differently than one in an area located on the other side of the country. Socioeconomic factors (be they for the person or a family member) also play a large role, among other things that can impact a response. As such, it's definitely important to find a secondary source, as they can provide this context, verification, and commentary.

Another thing to watch out for is original research, as you seem to draw your own conclusions based on the data provided from the survey. This needs to be avoided as we can only summarize what has already been stated and should not draw ties between the studies.

I hope that this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:43, 8 April 2019 (UTC)