User talk:Jay Laetsch/sandbox

Feedback and peer review on Czech Texans by Jesus Rodriguez

Intro/Lead Paragraph:
 * Look into adding more detail and depth about the importance and impact of Czechs in Texas.
 * Give a few specific examples of the Czech Texan identity( how you mentioned architecture, food, and traditional events). Give a few strong examples of each to give the reader a more vivid image of Czech traditions and development.
 * Not sure if this information is somewhere in your research, but maybe give the reasons why Czechs were more highly attracted to Texas than other states.
 * add detail concerning Czechs and the reason behind why they moved to Texas and why they specifically chose Texas Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Talk more about the impact that the Czechs had in Texas and discuss details about their heritage in particular Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * What political climate fueled them to come to America specifically Texas? Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers
 * What are some of the traditional events?Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers
 * What are some of the impacts of their culture and what would be considered the most memorable? Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers

Political and Ethnic Identity:
 * Go into more depth about describing how the Civil War helped create the identity of Czechs within Texas.
 * Could give examples of what Czechs faced more specifically that helped them become more accustomed to life in the U.S. as well as Texas.
 * Describe the increase of immigration of Czechs after the Union blockade was over.
 * Describe the overall process of how Czechs started getting accustomed to the United States during the time of the Civil War, and discuss their struggles of getting accustomed while also keeping true to their heritage. Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Why did the Austrian Empire make such a big impact on West Europe?Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers
 * How did the citizens feel about the mandatory military service? Were they happy to serve with a purpose or did they believe the Revolution was unnecessary?Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers
 * What kind of political identity did they hold and why was American democracy so foreign to them? Expand on their political identity because I'm not really sure from reading this what Czechs believed in and why they came to America.Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers

Military Service:
 * If you have the information, give the statistics of what percentage of Czechs chose to join Confederacy and the Union, etc.
 * Give a little of a background of the Civil War to create a better flow and understanding within this heading.
 * Maybe explain how Czechs serving under the Confederate army helped create a stronger connection between Czechs and Texas( Since Texas was part of the Confederacy).
 * If you have the information, give more reasons as to why the some stayed with the Confederacy while others served in the Union Army or hid. Also, discuss the amount of Czechs that were involved in the war. Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Why did some Czechs want to fight in the Army but others did not? Was it because of their political views, did they not agree with the war, or did they just not side with the America's way of naturalization?Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers

Family Life:
 * Describe if farming was the only focus of Czech families or if there were other functions that Czech families focused on.
 * Also include information of Czech children: Did they go to school? Did they only help with house and farm work?
 * Give estimates of general family sizes of Czech Texans.
 * Might be able to go more into detail about Czech traditions here with Czech foods made by families and the Czech holidays that were celebrated (or could create an entire new heading describing Czech traditions in Texas).
 * Discuss all aspects of family life such as what the wives, husbands, and children do as far as work and school go. Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Discuss in detail the impact that husbands leaving for the war had on the wives and children. Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Add information about heritage into the family life. Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * How did the women keep the farms running? Were children involved with the farm labor or was it just the women? How did the farms work? Expand on women's involvement with the planting, cooking, cleaning, and hunting. Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers
 * How did the families produce homemade commodities were they grown, bought at a cheaper price, or traded with other families?Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers

Individual Stories: Anthony M. Dignowity:
 * Grammar error in the first sentence, just add “to” between “traveled” and “Texas”
 * Clarify if Anthony M. Dignowity was for or against slavery according to the contradictions in the second and third paragraphs.
 * Go more into detail to what was the proposed plan by Dignowity and if after being rejected, did he make any further contributions or did all stop there.
 * Add more description to the identity of Dignowity. Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * I agree with the grammar error above Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Expand on why he was so against slavery and what he did after his plan was rejected from Congress.Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers
 * What did he do during the war, did he hide, advocate, or work on a farm?Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers

Overall, the structure of the page is solid and citations are given well from reliable sources: however, you simply need to go more in-depth in some areas to help give it better flow throughout the whole page. This will help readers understand the importance of Czech Texans at a larger scale. Also, I'm not sure if you were going to do this (and you most likely will), but add more stories under the "Individual Stories" headline.

The article is very good, but it could use more detailed information. Also, most information comes from a single source, so finding some more material (if possible) might be helpful. Also, adding more information on individual people as well as the impact that individuals and the Czech population as a whole had on the State of Texas would be great! Overall, you have a great article!

After reading the article, I found that the article could use some more detail to describe why Czech immigrants focused on Texas as their home. Try adding more information about their political background, for example, were they drawn to anti-slavery because of the feudal system? Overall, I did enjoy reading the article the material is well written and easy to comprehend. Kav026 (talk) 01:06, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Kayla Vickers

--Jrodriguez6114 (talk) 21:16, 25 March 2019 (UTC) --Jrodriguez6114 (talk) 21:18, 25 March 2019 (UTC) Emilynicole0224 (talk) 00:05, 27 March 2019 (UTC)

Thank you all for the feedback. Jay Laetsch (talk) 20:09, 2 May 2019 (UTC)