User talk:Jayjay Ugbe/New sandbox

Sophia's peer review
Lead: Really good start with a clear overview of her life! If you wanted, I think it would be a better idea to put the info sentence about her parents in the early years section since it is not core information about Clotilde Brewster. Also, the "D" in daughter doesn't need to be capitalized. Also, a few of the other articles I've seen have birth and death dates in parenthesis after her name in the lead, so that may be something to consider.

Sections: Clear section titles with good chronology.

Early Years section: So far you have a majority information about her parents which is fine and actually really interesting, just make sure you don't end up with more information about them than about her in this section; you want to have a good balance. So far, it is strictly factual and unbiased so that's good!

Neutral Content: So far the article is totally neutral.

Sources: There are no citations or sources in the article so far which isn't good. I'm sure you have them written down somewhere else, just don't forget to put them in! Also, if you are planning to put all of your sources/citations in at the end, it might be a good idea to make small notes throughout the article (maybe in parentheses) to remind you which sentences or information came from which source so you don't get confused and make mistakes later on.

Sharing the Love: You are really detailed and thorough without being too wordy which makes the article really interesting and easy to read. I am excited to read more about Clotilde's life because there isn't much information about her yet, but I think it will be very interesting!

Other notes: You refer to your person by her first name, which I think is fine, but I would ask just to make sure you aren't supposed to refer to her by her last name. You could be right though I'm not sure.

Sophia.colosi (talk) 17:53, 11 July 2019 (UTC)

Vishal's Peer-Review
[A lead section] The lead section for Clotilde Kate Brewster was appropriately done as it is able to introduce the person and it provides a list of who she is and what she did. At the end of the last sentence in the lead, you could add an example of the most famous building that she designed or renovated.

[A clear structure] The draft was in chronological order and was able to flow very well between the different sections of the article, from the lead into her early life, and how her early life impacted the career she later went into. The article was comprehensible the whole way through.

[Balanced coverage] There is somewhat more information concerning her early life compared to her career. If your sources allow, try adding in more information in the section about her career. This problem could also be solved once you finish the section about her later life.

[Neutral content] The article showed no signs of there being an apparent bias.

[Reliable sources] No sources are cited yet, so try to fix that soon.

Vmalla3 (talk) 17:37, 15 July 2019 (UTC)