User talk:Jayla P/Convergence culture

I did some editing on the part where we mention Jenkins responds to the the people responding to him (I wish I could figure out how to word that better.) But I'm not sure how important that information is since it's not specifically about the information on the book. Should we add a section about reception to the book and move that section there? ParkerJennings (talk) 02:58, 23 February 2020 (UTC)Parker Oh, I just made that sentence for an exercise we did, I have no problem with you cutting it out. TheSeedV (talk) 00:14, 24 February 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review of Convergence Culture
Hey CC group!

I have peer reviewed your article. Please refer to the template provided for all specific details as to my peer review. Overall, here is what I have stated:
 * In the lead, the sentence beginning with, "Users can now.."- The syntax of the statement posses a bias element. I'd elaborate that it was a "suggested" view from your resources used.
 * I'd elaborate on the meaning of "convergence." It's stated throughout the article, but to someone new to the subject, it may cause confusion. With this, it gives you an opportunity to enrich the article with information and new sources.
 * Another term I'd define is "mean-making." It's under the topic "Collective Intelligence."
 * Within the same topic, (above bullet point) the sentence beginning with, "this collective intelligence behind..," posses another bias opinion.

There were a few spelling and capitalization errors that I already have edited within the article. One example was the word "engrained," where I corrected it to "ingrained."

There is a standalone link ( 14 ) under the topic of "Matrix" without any content to support it.

Overall, the article is off to a great start. It has great organization. It now needs to be elaborated. KRCPhilmon (talk) 22:15, 23 February 2020 (UTC)