User talk:Jaysdayy/sandbox

Gloria's peer review
Your topic is very interesting and something that is not very well covered by others. I think maybe you can provide more background information regarding the American prison system, such as the difference between federal and state system. Also if you can, link the court cases to the related Wikipedia internal links.

--GloriaGu2018 (talk) 06:17, 23 March 2018 (UTC)

Hi GloriaGu2018, I appreciate the advice on providing more information about the background on prisons. I feel that is something my research is lacking. I will definitely look into the differences between federal, state and other prisons. I will link the court cases once I figure out how I will incorporate them into my article. Thank you so much for the great advice, it was very helpful! Jaysdayy (talk) 07:12, 25 March 2018 (UTC)

Gabby's Peer Review
I think that you have a good start and feel that finding information about privacy in prisons may be difficult because of particular institutions that hide their actions.

In terms of your draft, I think that you perhaps could add a little bit more when you define privacy in prisons. Perhaps you can briefly highlight the different forms that inmates, guards, administrators or whoever else is involved may face a lack of privacy and what type of privacy this is (such as women inmates that are searched by the male sex guards).

From a definition and bit of background, I think it would be good to transition in talking about the specific laws/acts/cases that define what privacy is and how it should be maintained within prisons such as how you mentioned the Fourth Amendment and two other cases. Are there specific acts that state what is allowed in terms of privacy within prisons?

Also, you talk about incarceration rates, maybe as a way to expand a little, you perhaps can talk about which group is primarily being incarcerated, what type of women, men, or individuals to highlight who may be affected the most or possibly this is not so important because privacy applies to anyone in prisons and not more groups than others?

Overall, good start! I look forward to reading more about your topic. If anything I said above is unclear or if you would like me to look over your article again please reach out!

GibsOfficial (talk) 19:01, 23 March 2018 (UTC)Gabby

Hi Gabby, I agree that perhaps finding information might be difficult. There is a lot of research on prisons but there may be prisons that don’t want things to be exposed. Thank you for your advice on how to improve my lead. I struggled a lot this week and this really helps! I know there are some laws and regulations but I am still looking into them. It’s a good reminder. Sometimes I get lost with all the information I find and it’s overwhelming. Thanks for the tip! I would love to expand on the incarceration rates but wasn’t sure if it was something I should expand on. It’s good to know that it can be an important part of my article. Thank you for your feedback!!

Jaysdayy (talk) 07:14, 25 March 2018 (UTC)