User talk:Jaytea22/sandbox

Hi JT, Your new points for your article are very good. There are some things that need revising. (1) the "a" needs to be changed to "an" (2) possibly change the verb "establish" and make the new verb past tense
 * There are two grammatical errors in the first sentence that need fixing.
 * Sentence number three needs a citation.
 * There is also no indication where your contribution would be placed in the actual article. The indication would make your sandbox more organized. HHonore22 (talk) 20:35, 21 April 2020 (UTC)HHonore22

Hi JT,

Your statements are concise and easy to understand. In your third sentence you forgot a "d" in Haddad. Some more information could be included about the importance of Malek. You could copy and paste the other paragraphs in the section and then decide where the paragraph best fits.Naomiper (talk) 20:52, 23 April 2020 (UTC)Naomiper