User talk:Jbdbaseball

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Your submission at Articles for creation: sandbox (November 19)
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MatthewVanitas (talk) 03:25, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

Peer Review
Sorry I didn't get this posted earlier. I was confused on where this needed to be sent. I hope that this information will help you (and that this is the right place).

Here is my peer review for the article: (1) The article does contain important information for both general and scientific audiences. However, attempts to mix it and define everything, I feel, takes away a bit from the professional feel. This I find especially in “Heavy Chain (larger peptide subunit)” etc. (2) I feel like there can be a better transition to the second paragraph. It lacks a topic sentence to understand what will be contained there. In the third paragraph, there could be a better integration of what the different targeted proteins are. The current flow seems rather stuttered. (3) Length for each section does seem good. (4) I believe that the sections are well balanced. (5) It does satisfy aims. (6) The terms are linked well in general. “Proteolytic cleavage” could be a good term to link. (7) The image does help, but I did notice that the exact same figure is found already on the Botulinium toxin page. (8) The references are good. (9) I believe that “Light Chain” and “Heavy Chain” should both be lower case. In paragraph three, it says “BoNT/C Also…”; the “also” should be lower case. There are times that it feels a bit wordy with a lot of “this results in”, or “by doing so”, etc. A more clear and concise description could improve clarity. (10) All of the assigned criteria is satisfied. However, I need to add, I am not sure that I see this fitting well in the article on SNARE proteins. A brief overview of this information would probably be sufficient, especially since there is a page on Botulinium toxin. Some of this information might be better integrated there. TSto1 (talk) 07:23, 20 November 2014 (UTC)

Your draft article, User:Jbdbaseball/sandbox


Hello, Jbdbaseball. It has been over six months since you last edited your WP:AFC draft article submission, entitled "sandbox".

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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. JMHamo (talk) 20:22, 26 May 2015 (UTC)