User talk:Jbdorame/sandbox

Hello! I was reading over your proposed edit to the transmasculine article and I really like how you brought up the underrepresentation of the subject in society. This also leads to the MISrepresentation of transmasculinity. The only suggestion I have is that your paragraph on Chaz Bono sounds a bit biased to me, even though I do agree with you. Maybe use words that are more scholastic to make it come off more neutral. Haleyfallin (talk) 02:41, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

More edits needed before moving to main space
Your section on Chas Bono is a good start, but it absolutely needs some citations in order to back up your claim. You could also have discussed the lack of other kinds of representation, and you might have mentioned the terrible representation of a transmasculine person on the Showtime series "The L Word" - I know there are some sources out there that discuss it.Drlmanderson (talk) 22:56, 4 December 2016 (UTC)