User talk:Jbjames/sandbox

I think the article could really benefit from more outside articles. Most of the research you have seems to be from the Smile Foundation website. This should only be referenced for basic facts, but not as your primary source. You need to reference a range of websites to ensure an unbiased article, and to verify their success.

You talk a bit about how they measure their success rate. Have they received any awards? If so, consider including a recognitions section where you include all of the awards they have received.

You talk a lot about the education and health care systems. I think that you could provide even more contextual information about the status of these issues in India today. Are they getting better? The statistics you provided for education were good, but I think you could use more. For example, what is the mortality rate? What specific diseases are a threat these days?

General Health Camps General: Are these health camps permanent or are they temporary like the 10 day camps?

Overall, think the language of the article can be a lot more specific. Here are some areas where you can add more research to specify what you are talking about and make it more powerful.

Swabhiman: What are the statistics for crime rates against women? What are some of the specific crimes that women suffer from? what lack of opportunities to women face for progressing their social standing? Does this mean that they are not hired for jobs? You say that the program uses innovative community practices to address the needs of women and children. What are these specific community practices? How do they work? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zelgartg (talk • contribs) 21:10, 19 November 2012 (UTC)