User talk:Jbracale/sandbox

Jacqueline - The draft is a start. There is very little academic or scholarly citations. If you look at other examples of government agencies you'll see that they include an introduction - What is it? What do they do? Second, there's typically a seciton on the history of the department - when it was founded? Why it was founded? Third, there's usually a section on leadership. Who's run the organization over time including the names of ministers. Finally, there's often a section on what impact the agency has had. Again, you'll want to bsse these descriptions on scholarly sources. Here's an example of agency website for Russia. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ministry_of_Justice_(Russia) Cassell04 (talk) 19:39, 10 March 2019 (UTC)

It's not clear to me what the article or contribution are. Are you planning to add to a particular article or create a new one. What's the topic? This draft needs a lot of work. I would come see me or reach out to Shalor.Mcassell04 (talk) 14:29, 14 October 2017 (UTC)

This topic has a lot of places you can take it. Especially with this class in political economy, there are a lot of costs and political situations that tend to get wrapped up in this topic as well. That being said I am not really sure what your article is about. Right now it seems like it is just a bunch of sited laws that changed death penalty codes and practices. To help the audience know what it is they are reading, I would suggest you add a title or a header in bold above the paragraph. Next, I would bring more of an economic aspect to it with another source since it seems like you only used two. If you write more you might want to break it into 2 paragraphs and add a photo or a picture to make it more professional looking. Lastly, I would add some hyperlinks to other articles so that your contribution can be seen and found from others.

Here is a possible source: https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=U7Nx-lwlaQAC&oi=fnd&pg=PA401&dq=death+penalty+tax+cost&ots=PrZDDCtU3p&sig=l_1SmJAHuFRZCY2e6vDlG4P76XI#v=onepage&q=death%20penalty%20tax%20cost&f=false

Michael Heil (talk) 19:13, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review
Your article contribution is well organized and I like how you have multiple distinct sections, however, some of them are lacking depth and could use a significant amount of additional information to make them worth-while. You are also doing a good job of having a large amount of solid and diverse sources from which to draw from. Dominick BattistoneDbattis3 (talk) 03:10, 11 March 2019 (UTC)