User talk:Jbyrd27/sandbox

The overall topic you've chose is very interesting. I would suggest finding for information to add to the article and addressing more of how human rights as a whole were violated a little more. Be sure to check for grammatical errors throughout the paper. You should add more information about the movement and add more details about the topic. It hard kind of giving a critique due to certain sections not really having much information added to it. I would suggest adding more information to the article and researching a little more about the topic to see if there is anymore information that could be added. You could elaborate more about what contribution they added to the Lemonade visual and research the reasons as to why she included them. Overall, the article was interesting and good. Your article very relevant to today's problems and I think would be very eye opening and appeasing to those in this generation.

ZuriShaw (talk) 05:20, 2 November 2018 (UTC)Zuri Shaw

Your draft is relatively good but is missing a few points. I see that you didn't cite any sources from where you found the information you put in your draft. You didn't clearly state what part of the wiki page you are adding to. Also while reading your draft, I saw that you didn't state your main points and didn't organize them either to let the reader know what you are adding to. And make sure that you add 4 main points and explain them clearly. And also use diverse but reputable sources when you add it to the draft.

Dianthia Williams (talk) 04:23, 3 November 2018 (UTC)DianthiaWilliams