User talk:Jchitala/sandbox

Hi Jose,

Your article presents extraordinary details of your topic. Moreover, your writing really impressed me because your sharp paraphrases make the details more comprehensive. I like how you divided your information into short and condense sections as well, which makes it much easier for the readers to follow through. In other words, the article is well-structured. The way that you utilized a table of content, bolded keywords, expressive subheadings, and simple paraphrases would be applicable to my article.

I think one thing that can be helpful for improving your article is adding a bit more information in your food shortages session (i.e. its effects on the population, responses of the society, incentives of the government, and etc); this would help the readers understand the significance of the operation more thoroughly. In addition, you may add a session to narrate the context of Operation Feed Yourself.

As a reader, I am wondering how the international context, such as the Cold War, played its role in Operation Feed Yourself. Was the operation ideology-driven?

Peer Review
This is a really great addition and you cover a lot of information on this page! Adding so many different sections really gives a good overview of the program. Each section has a good lead section, is clear to understand, and written in neutral language. I would however, maybe add a little more to the lead section at the very top of the page.

The suggestion I would make is to rework the order of the sections. It seems like "colonial legacy" should come before "food shortages" as to explain more of the background first. It is helpful to know more about the history to fully understand the issue at hand.

For your goal section, I don't know if this is possible but under the paragraph that you currently have it would be helpful to have a bullet point list of goals. I am sure this can be found in a report of the program, and this could be a good source to add to your citation list.

In your results section, it would be helpful to cite who thought it was a failure or how it was decided that this program was a failure. The first sentence right now seems like a little bit of a sweeping statement.

Also, I don't know if you are already planning on doing this but it could be interesting to add a section on any efforts that have been undertaken since this program to help food shortages in Ghana. Sophia Fossali Sophiafossali (talk) 19:10, 7 April 2019 (UTC)