User talk:Jchristen11

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Hi Jena. Hollisrenee3 (talk) 15:03, 5 October 2015 (UTC)

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Major Points: The author expands the In Captivity section of the Western Lowland Gorilla Wikipedia page. This section was very sparse and the author’s new four sections add organization and depth to the topic. The section heading Research Focus section is vague and the contents come across as biased. I would recommend rewording both the section header and contents. To enhance the new sections the author could integrate a few new links to other articles, such as coprophagy. The author may also want to consider removing the word Effective from the Effective Exhibit Modifications heading. In regard to the author’s Other Task To Do List I completely agree that this sentence should be moved as it does not fit in with the opening paragraph of the Western Lowland Gorilla page.

Minor Points: The author introduces five new sources to the Western Lowland Gorilla page, making it a better resource for the public. The last sentence of Effective Exhibit Modification is confusing and could be reworded. Citations are used throughout the text which makes it clear that the newly added sources are useful. Hollisrenee3 (talk) 17:15, 18 November 2015 (UTC)