User talk:Jchristen11/sandbox

Hi Jenna!! Major Points: I'm really interested in the subject your covering, always hate to see uncomfortable animals in zoos. 100% vegetarian over here. Not too much to complain about with the article. I imagine the content is almost verbatim copy'd over from Project 2, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but the writing is still a bit on the literature review side as oppose to encyclopedic. The two sentence opening paragraph could possibly be rewritten so it's not two long lists.

Minor Points: Is the subject "In Captivity"? Maybe use a more descriptive subject title, like "effects of captivity" or IDK. Pictures could add a nice touch to the page as well. Overall not half bad. I remember reading your Lit review for one of the class reviews and liking it a lot, glad to see your making a Wiki page on it. Warbeard (talk) 17:46, 20 November 2015 (UTC)