User talk:Jcichocki/sandbox

I thought this was a very good first draft. You added a lot of important information regarding the topic you chose. The only thing I saw was a few grammatical errors. Other than that, I thought this was a great start! I also believe you did a good job in finding your sources, as they all seem to be very reliable!

Copied the below over from the Trematode life cycle talk page (review placed in the wrong page). This review may be of the current existing article, not your draft - but you can take the suggested changes and incorporate them into the final page :

Peer Review
Hello, Your article seems to be coming together well. My only suggestion would be to watch your grammar in certain areas of your article:

Trematodes or flukes are small parasitic flatworms that use vertebrates as their definitive host and mollusks (usually freshwater snails or land snails) as their intermediate host.Their life cycle has several varied stages. The life cycle of a typical digenean trematode begins when its egg is immersed in water. Following this, the miracidium (explain what miracidium is) hatches, which swims to find a mollusk host. The miracidia goes through several stages in the mollusk, eventually emerging as motile cercariae larvae.[1] The cercariae either infects vertebrates through the skin or is ingested. In its vertebrate host, the cercaria matures to an adult form (fluke), and lays eggs that are discharged with the host feces or urine. In the presence of open water, the eggs hatch and the miracidium stage of life is reached again.

Egg Discharged either in open water or in intestine of definitive host. Miracidium (plural miracidia) A free-living motile form, covered with cilia, and settles in the mollusk to become a sporocyst.[3] Sporocyst An elongated sac, produces either rediae or more sporocysts.[4] Redia (plural rediae) A larval form with an oral sucker, produces either more rediae, or cercariae.[4] Cercaria (plural cercariae) The larval form of the parasite, develops within the germinal cells of the sporocyst or redia.[4] A cercaria has a tapering head with large penetration glands.[3] It may or may not have a long swimming "tail", depending on the species.[4] The motile cercaria finds and settles in a host where it will become either an adult, or a mesocercaria, or a metacercaria, according to species. Mesocercaria A cercaria little modified but resting. Metacercaria A cercaria encysted and resting. Cercaria is also used as a genus of trematodes, when adult forms are not known.[5] The usage dates back to Müller, in 1773.[6]

Adult The fully developed mature stage and is capable of sexual reproduction.

Other than those changes, the article is fine! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ooluw003 (talk • contribs) 20:53, 2 April 2018 (UTC)  — Preceding unsigned comment added by Agleichsner (talk • contribs)

Here are some additional comments!

- In your introduction paragraph: Trematodes are flukes, so the end of your first sentence is not accurate. Instead you could say 'Trematodes are parasitic flukes..." - The next two sentences overlap with the Trematoda wikipedia page and should be removed. Instead, make sure that you retain the link to that page in your article. - I would say 'begins' instead of 'can start' for "The life cycle of a typical..." - Some trematode eggs hatch in water, others are eaten by the first intermediate host and hatch within that host...make sure that your paragraph includes both of these options. I think your current version of this paragraph is too rushed - for example, you don't mention sporocyst or redia stages at all in this first paragraph. - In general, your first summary paragraph about trematode life cycles needs some clarification. For example, metacercariae don't only form in vertebrates, sometimes they form in a second intermediate host that is a snail (an invertebrate). It may be better to just say 'second intermediate host'.

- Egg: I would say 'depending on the species" instead of stage.

-Echoing your other reviewers: Carefully review your draft for issues with grammar, spelling, run-on sentences, and changes in tense.

- Make sure you distinguish the fact that not all trematode species have a redia stage. Some just have a sporocyst stage.

- You can add a reference about competition between sporocysts and redia.

Overall a good start! Agleichsner (talk) 15:38, 9 April 2018 (UTC)