User talk:Jderen1/sandbox

Jsulli25 (talk) 03:48, 15 February 2019 (UTC)Hello, my name is Joshua Sullivan and I have done a peer review on the article you've been working on Purges of the Communist Party of the Soviet Union. I'm not sure but I am assuming the group chose this article to rework and add to rather than writing this article from scratch. I say that due to the fact that I see parts of the article that have a different writing and editing style and are much clearer than others. The article presents relevant material pertaining to the topic but lacks citations in some sections. The article seemed free from bias for the most part. According to the history page there have been many edits to the page already. I marked a few more places that could benefit from being worked over. I left recommendations at several places in the article and I left them in parenthesis and marked them with my initials. Here is an example (Citation?-JS). I found several places that need citations added, especially for the first half of the article. I found and marked places that need punctuation edits and sentences could be reworded to make them more clear and concise. Once again many of those were in the first and last portions of the article. The portion of the article that have already been edited looked good for the most part, however, I found some minor things that could be addressed there too. I am assuming this group made those changes and added citations. That work was great and no doubt easier to read and follow. You guys chose a good article to add to and revise. It looks like the group did a good job of finding a wide range of sources to use and implemented changes from those sources to make the article more precise. Overall, I feel like the group did a good job of making that article better, and could further improve the article by implementing their knowledge and work to the entire article. Thanks, Joshua Sullivan-Group 9 Jsulli25 (talk) 03:48, 15 February 2019 (UTC)

Beccann6112 I am giving a peer review on the article that your group has been editing/adding to. First of all, I think you made an excellent choice in an article. It has a lot of potential, its an interesting topic and there is bound to be a lot of information about this time in history. The article seems unbiased, which can be difficult when writing about arrests, imprisonments and eventual executions.I like that you guys have a lot of citations in this article, but I think that certain paragraphs could definitely use some more citations. Yes, the information is there, but where did you get it? I think that the information that has been added makes the article easier to understand. This you did through supplying more information and wording things in a way that others will be able to follow easily. You guys are doing a great job, and I cannot wait to see what the end result will be. Keep up the good work! -Rebecca Olson from Group 1 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Beccann6112 (talk • contribs) 02:44, 16 February 2019 (UTC)

Leighs Peer Review
I think that you all chose a great article to make edits to! Due to its subject matter it's difficult to stay unbiased but I think you all have done a good job in keeping level. I think that this article could use a bit of polishing with the citations, and that's to make it perfect as its already so good, there were a few moments in reading that i itched to see the source but there was no citation. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Leigh.pfeiffer (talk • contribs) 05:38, 17 February 2019 (UTC)

Just wanted to let everyone know that I went through the article in detail, and made all grammar corrections I could find. - Chandler Mattice — Preceding unsigned comment added by Chan Mattice (talk • contribs) 21:45, 24 February 2019 (UTC)