User talk:JeanFrankso

Welcome!
Hello, JeanFrankso, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Sandbox question
Can you explain to me what problems you're having editing your sandbox? You should just be able to click the edit button and write. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:50, 23 February 2017 (UTC)

Feedback
Hi. Adam is actually the Content Expert for your class, so you should direct these questions at him.

As for your question - to answer that, we'd need to know what article you're planning to contribute to. Is it an existing article, or are you planning something new? Have you checking against the checklist in the Editing Wikipedia brochure? Have you carefully copy-edited your work? Mass media, social media, century - all these words shouldn't be capitalized. The first sentence: isn't grammatically correct. It's all terribly vague as well. You need a lot more specifics and a lot less filler. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 12:19, 24 February 2017 (UTC)

peer review: 'criticism' section in article "Mass media: Difference between revisions"
Hi there, Just read through your criticism section that you added to the article "Mass media: Difference between revisions". You make some really good, neutral points examining the critique of mass media and it's revisions, and you back these up with a couple of solid sources. However, I think a few minor copy-edits could be made to the section to make the sentences flow a bit better. I believe references are also supposed to be placed at the end of the sentence, after the period, rather than in the middle of it. The last comment I would make regards the following sentence: "Conclusively, there is a strong critique that mass media in fact no longer exists in the same way that it once did, it has been re-invented". The word "conclusively" here indicates a slight bias, or suggests there is no other way of interpreting the critique, and thus this statement could be revised to project a more neutral presentation of the material. Lhalas (talk) 23:12, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

Hi there! Thanks for your critique, I have made some changes based on your insights!

Cheers