User talk:Jennie Abarca/sandbox

Article Peer Review Suggestions
Your addition to your article you chose to edit, “Same Sex Marriage in California”, is relevant to the topic, however I noticed a few incidents of repetition. For example, you write, “Same-sex marriage legislation was announced in the 1970's to have pronouncations to those who choose to be pronounced another way instead of him/her.”. I noticed in the Legislation section of the article you chose, it states, “From the enactment of legislation in 1971 to replace gendered pronouns with gender-neutral pronouns, until 1977”. You are also missing a source where you found your information, you only list the wiki article. As I read on, I believe you may have used the article from wiki to find information rather that finding from a different source to add to the wiki article. Your addition is missing a heading so I am not sure where you would plan to insert the information you find. There also seem to be grammatical errors and the wording used sounds a little opinionated at times rather than facts. Overall, I think you are one the right track finding information relating to same sex marriage, you just need to find information from a different and reliable source to add to the wiki article.ConradRobin (talk) 23:03, 2 November 2020 (UTC)