User talk:Jeouellette/sandbox

I think this article is well written, good job! There are a few things I would change however. I would move the personal life section towards the top of the article. I think it would flow better there. Also, in part of the article that you didn't write it mentions the schools he went to. You also added it in. I think removing it from the other section would be helpful so it is not so repetitive. Other than that though, your article is good! Jmwood48 (talk) 19:58, 17 June 2018 (UTC)

Interesting choice of topic. I knew very little about this individual. It might be helpful to link a few of the thinks mentioned in the lead section to other articles on Wikipedia. Especially as someone who didn't know much about it I thought that I wanted to read more about a few of the terms mentioned. There are attempts to organize the previous article here, but I would recommend using the formatting feature Wikipedia provides. On the top right side while editing, there is a drop down menu with choice of headings. I think that using this feature to break up the article with clear headings will be very useful. The start is good, and I feel that on the whole you are headed in the right direction, however I am wondering if there is enough information to write about? Fish.ty (talk) 20:12, 18 June 2018 (UTC)