User talk:Jeremy Chi/Peanut milk

Feedback from Kaylea
Hi

This is a bold change! My feedback is going to be super blunt but please take this only as me wanting you to succeed.

To succeed in this shift in direction, lean heavily on existing examples -- check out https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Oat_milk.

From there, you'll see a lot of common sections and sources. Use Oat milk as a model as you go. The Almond Eater doesn't look like a reliable source. Listing brands is also not typical. Compare what you have to Almond milk and Oat milk and add whatever you can find good sources for quickly.

Let me know when you have more to look at.

Kaylea Champion (talk) 21:28, 12 February 2022 (UTC)

Go Live Approval
Hi

This is ok to go live. Before you do, please fix these issues:


 * the image comparing peanuts to other nuts in terms of water use doesn't look like something we have the rights to -- if it's not owned by you, or clearly posted as public domain, it can't be added


 * Incas versus Carver -- probably he's the "modern" inventor? it's weird to say the incas did it, and then he was the inventor. I think the detail about being a conservationist is probably not relevant. do you have more refs for the Invention paragraph maybe? The cite to a medium post is also not reliable -- it's a blog rather than a news site with an editorial policy for fact checking


 * the citations for the table sources can go in the header of the table


 * the 'further reading' list probably doesn't need the Retail sales data, that's already in the ref list.

Overall, this is great progress and fast work. Once these fixes are made, you can go live with the following steps:

As a reminder, here are our go-live steps:


 * 1) Final read-through draft.
 * 2) Check live article for changes. [History Tab]
 * 3) Two browsers side by side, if you can. Source editing mode ("Code mode"), not visual editor.
 * 4) Paragraph by paragraph copy, leaving behind an explanatory edit summary after each chunk of changes.
 * 5) Note on article talk page.
 * 6) Note at the top of your sandbox version.
 * 7) Submit a link to your article on Canvas.
 * 8) Celebrate!

Kaylea Champion (talk) 18:04, 13 February 2022 (UTC)