User talk:Jerry22gr/S-Works Epic

Hi Jerry --

This article is coming along very well.

You need to avoid subjective evaluative statements and adjectives, such as "unsurpassed". Stick to facts and maintain a neutral point of view.

Look carefully at word choice (e.g., steerer seems like the wrong term) and check spelling (breaks s.b. brakes).

Also, the opening paragraph should begin with a definition of the bike, not the company, I think.

I'll look at it again when you tell me you think you're almost done.

Joe

--Joegrohens 03:21, 15 November 2006 (UTC)