User talk:Jerryfu10/sandbox

For US Elections: I see a lot of quoting under this section. I know that quoting is very direct but I would suggest extracting the essence of some of the quotes and citing them. This makes the article seem more wikipedia like and maybe more informative. Maybe get rid of "I think" and say something more direct and impartial.

Otherwise, good job on this!

For Google Cloud Platform: Nomulus -- it would be interesting to see where the funding came from. Is it all from Google internally? Why did they decide this to be an open infrastructure? Maybe say more about the timeline (expand more on the current text) and where the firm's direction is, and how Nomulus fits into Google's strategy.

For Open SNP: Good segmentation, the lead section should capture the purpose of the article.

Also, make sure to include more peer-reviewed articles. (I think professor wanted more than half peer reviewed articles).

2602:304:791D:2E60:2425:66C4:7866:E5D8 (talk) 02:29, 30 October 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review Response
Thank you @ahjayce! While writing my edits on "US Elections", I felt that I was using too many elongated quotes as well. I have cut some of the quotes down and paraphrased them. Good suggestion!

For Nomulus, I really liked your ideas on how this fits into Google's overall strategy and will be sure to mention it in my edits. Since this is a relatively new innovation, Google hasn't released much about its timeline but I can try to trace the history and influences. I also am inspired to find more on the effects/implications of this new innovation.

Lastly, good reminder to create a solid lead section and include more peer-reviewed articles!! Jerryfu10 (talk) 23:15, 2 November 2016 (UTC)