User talk:Jetlag11/Zakariya Rashid Hassan al-Ashiri

Overall, you provide some basic points which provide the reader with a decent amount of information. I was able to get a general idea of who he was, why he's important, how he died etc. However, there are obviously areas which could be elaborated on (i.e., Context, Reactions, Career). Of course, I don't know how easily you were able to find information on this person.

Based on Crtew's Rubric, Criteria Who, alt names, bio dates, nationality, job, medium, & outlet & city/country of outlet, and notability - You seem to have covered all of these criteria; the only thing I would suggest is adding the name of the local website he worked for in Al-Dair, Bahrain at the beginning in case the reader isn't familiar with the local news outlets in Al-Dair. Death: What happened? - I would say that you answered each of the who, what, where, when, why, how (many) questions. - I can’t really comment on Context, Reactions, or Career sections. Impact: What argument for notability makes this journalist worthy of an encyclopedic entry? - I think the fact that you specifically state, “Zakariya Rashid Hassan Al-Ashiri was the first journalist to die in direct relation to his work since The Committee to Protect Journalists (CPJ) started it's records in 1992,” answers this question. Also, the second, “In response to his death, the Newseaum in Washington, D.C. will be adding his name along with 16 others to the Journalists Memorial Wall,” further reinforces this person’s importance. Personal and Career Data - I had trouble finding information for these sections, as there just wasn’t much available. Obviously, if you can find anything about how long he had been working for the website, as well as family (i.e., spouse and/or children, if he had either), these areas would be stronger. Internal & External Links and References - If you could reference the websites, from which you obtained certain information, within the article after each new fact, it would help the reader, allowing them to explore those aspects more deeply. As for external links, I couldn’t find any either. Also, don’t forget to remove the instructions (from the Word document Crtew posted) from the article. -AMDurchholz

The last reviewer was very thorough! I had some of the same observations and concur. I tried to point out where in your article you should use inline citation and how you could make the entry more informative. You should also do more research. The information is out there to find. For instance, you should summarize what was going on in Bahrain at the time. The two Bahraini journalists died very close in time to each other, and you should mention the other journalist. And UNESCO, I know, has issued a statement about both deaths. Try to be more detailed when you write and attempt to address questions that readers might have. Don't forget to add his name to Wikipedia's "deaths_in_MONTH_YEAR" page. Can you find Al-Dair web site? Crtew (talk) 19:38, 27 October 2011 (UTC)