User talk:Jfkelly121

Hi Everyone. I thought this Wiki was great. It was very neutral, and there was a lot of research already done on a topic I did not know that much about. I only made a few very minor errors with punctuation and grammar that I thought may have been in the wrong place or worded wrong. The sources were perfect. Even though they were off the website directly, you still made it sound neutral. Great article all around I thought you all did a very good job.

-James Matthews

Informative article! I think this was really well prepared and researched. For changes, I only found places for minor edits. I added a link to one of the Dick's Sporting Goods mentions and also changed a little bit under the "Location" heading. I thought the description was maybe a bit biased, but only because I was actively looking for biases in the article. Overall, I think this looks great! Well done, everyone! - Allie Jones — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sconesjones (talk • contribs) 16:34, 20 November 2012 (UTC)

•	Major Fixes o	Reference section needs to be in correct format •	Example: Last name, First name “Title of Article” URL link. Date it was accessed •	Minor Fixes o	References can be listed once and linked to multiple paragraphs. This will help reduce clutter and repetition in the reference section o	A few spelling and grammatical mistakes •	I think you meant to use “Changes” instead of “Chances” in the history section •	Confused about “dedicated parking lot” in location section •	Not sure if last sentence in competition section is supposed to be a part of the whole paragraph or separate. •	Optional Additions o	For each reference, link it to the website so users can easily view each one o	Maybe add a general information box in the right hand corner. Allows you to add a picture of the company and easily list basic information such as owner, location, time of establishment o	The addition of a few more references would be helpful to your page. I found researching this topic very difficult and was unable to find another source besides customer reviews. Even searching the owner, Betsy Frey, came up with one or two sites with little to no credible information. Final Notes I think your team made a solid Wiki page for a very hard company to research. Your formatting is fine and each section keeps a neutral tone. A few sections have some spelling and grammatical mistakes. Once those are fixed, the article will be easier to read and much more clear. I can see how this company helps with local sports teams and with low income youth, but without the addition of more research, the details to support this social venture are minimal. I think your team picked a very challenging company but you made a good looking Wiki article overall. -Garrett Taft — Preceding unsigned comment added by JMatthews12 (talk • contribs) 16:55, 20 November 2012 (UTC)