User talk:Jflynn20

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Hello, Jflynn20, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Peer Review 11/19
I really enjoyed reading your article!

Everything was very relevant to the topic-- nothing distracted me. I also didn't notice any biased, subjective language. It seemed very balanced and informative.

I also really liked your lead because it was concise but informative.

You have a lot of good sources-- I didn't notice any that violated the Wikipedia source requirements.

I did notice, in the first sentence of the "Personal Life" section, her name is first typed as Moore, then Nelson a sentence later. I'm not sure if it would be best to have uniformity in her name or reflect her marital status at the time, but I thought I'd point it out!

Also, in the section of "Personal Life" revolving around her relationship with Paul, I think this sentence: "At the time, it was frowned upon to intervene with a man's right to do as he pleases with his wife, so little was done." could either be reworked or removed-- I personally found it a little distracting from the facts about their relationship, but it's hard because I do think that historical context could be important.

Otherwise, I think it looks really good!

Grace.boehm (talk) 13:44, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review
Your contributions to Alice Dunbar Nelson's wikipedia page are fantastic! Reading throughout the article, your edits allowed me to have a better understanding on the authors life as well as in a nonbiased format. I don't have much constructive criticisms for this page, but I would suggest to go through the introductory paragraph and check for grammatical errors. I feel as if the sentence regarding the men that Nelson married could be less run-on. BUt otherwise, the organization and tone of the entire article based on the edits you made are fantasticly done. I am inspired to finish my article and to do so in the way that you have done so here. Great work! MyaKreuer (talk) 17:08, 19 November 2020 (UTC)