User talk:Jgross2atLSU/Draft Article

=Peer Review from Ryan Boucher= This is a very interesting article. You did a good job setting up the article and explaining both theories of an anoxic or dysoxic environment. You also provided a great deal of information throughout the article from your many references, which is good. Some things that could be improved are:


 * 1) You need to have a lot more internal wiki links to terms such as transgression, eustacy, bentonite, etc.
 * 2) You have some grammatical errors, such as: you linked biomineralization but the text should read biomineralized, the second sentence under the Initiation section needs to be reworded along with putting anoxic after (WIS). And the first sentence in the Env Per/Strat section could use rewording also.
 * 3) Your figure is very nice and detailed and I'm sure it took awhile to make, but it is somewhat confusing.
 * 4) Additional figures, such as images of the WIS would be useful.
 * 5) In the Intro you could add just a sentence or two describing what anoxic means for all the people out there that don't know what it means. Although anyone that searches this topic should understand it already.

Overall the article is well written for a draft page and cleaning it up shouldn't be that difficult.

= Dustin's Review =


 * Your figure looks good but I would add some labels on it or make a key for it. Also move the figure up into the tectonic setting section or refer to it in the text


 * I will add a few internal wiki link terms to ryans list: Sevier Orogeny, Caribbean large igneous province,


 * This page seems to be above a high school level. Try to replace bigger words with what they mean. instead of saying eustasy say a change in seal level throughout the world.


 * no one will know what 13Corganic curve is. Try to find some internal wiki links to explain it. Carbon-13, or δ13C — Preceding unsigned comment added by DBoyd13 (talk • contribs) 02:53, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

Overall I think the article is good, just add some internal wiki links and make it easier for the everyday person to understand.

=Peer Review Jacob Bourgeois= Your page is well developed! I would add more links to other wikipedia pages on some of the words you used in the opening paragraph. You may even want to give a definition of "anoxic". Dr. Webb explained that our pages should be written for the high school level, and few high school students are exposed to this material. You may want to "dumb it down" a little bit. I know that sounds rediculous, but I think the effect of the page may be aided by that action.

Tectonic Setting
The last sentence may need some revision to aid in the flow of the idea.

Drawing
The drawing looks great! You may want to add a legend or do a little more labeling to it. All in all it looks great to me though! It looks like you put a lot of hard work and time into it!

The page flows well and is for the most part concise! I would try to add more links to other pages in order for the primary reading level (high school) can understand the topics covered. In addition to the links, you may want to simply define some of the words used. Again, I remember that I was exposed to very few geological ideas in high school, so you may want to keep that in mind during the revision process! Great Job!!! Jbour46 (talk) 13:14, 22 October 2012 (UTC)