User talk:Jiajing Liu/Lion Grove Garden

Edit Plan
Hello everyone, my topic is about a classical Chineses Garden called Lion Grove Garden.

It is a traditional Suzhou Garden with a long history since Yuan Dynasty of China.

I hope to improve this article by adding more scientific resources including the number of tourists each year, the ticket price, the major tourist attractions etc.

Also, the article needs to be improved by adding more backgrounds.

sources: https://mar.mcgill.ca/article/view/35/30

Peer review
The history part is very informational and comprehensively. You choose lots of references and external links and some of them are updated. Also, it is good to use template and pictures to make the article looks attracting. However, the lead part could add some contents summary about history, design, and tourists that you mentioned in your following article. Besides, for the history part, the last several sentences do not follow the time order, such as you can put the part about the “garden attracted the notable visitors in 1373” in the first half paragraph. Also, I will suggest you add more information and details in the major tourist attractions part and tourism information, for instance, when the place has been evaluated as grade AAAA and how many people on average visit the Lion Grove Garden every year or season. --VikkiX (talk) 22:15, 31 January 2020 (UTC)

peer review
I noticed that you have added and changed some of the information in the “History” section and I think I’m well informed by this section. Although I think some of the tones in this section can be more neutral, for example the beginning part “Of all the famous rock-gardens in history, only one has survived.” I also like that you added major "Tourist Attractions" and "Tourism information" to this article, which makes it more complete and can offer more tourists information for people who are interested in visiting there. You can also update the lead to add an overview of the sections that you added. Some of the reference links also need to be fixed since they do not link to the right website anymore: “World Cultural Heritage (2004), The Classical Gardens of Suzhou, CIP, p. 217, ISBN 7-214-03763-7" this one in particular.Violetzq (talk) 22:47, 31 January 2020 (UTC)

Feedback on your article
I've looked at the changes between your version and the live version. The changes aren't huge but they look good to me.

You should make sure to include references. For example, you said, "According to a garden record of the Yuan dynasty, there were ten thousand bamboo plants and many eccentric rocks in the Lion Grove. Among those rocks, one peak of them looks like a lion, thus, the garden has named The Lion Grove Garden." This should have a reference!

You also might want to consider adding references, as we requested.

In general, the things you've add all look improvements though so I don't see a problem with moving these over now.

Before you do, you might want to take a look at this list of suggestions for polishing your article which is a helpful set of ideas from. Many won't apply but some might. In any case, do a pass or two to address things I've mentioned and any of the things on the list on our website that apply and that you think will be helpful and/or improve the article. Then go ahead and make your changes in the live article. — m a k o ๛  05:51, 14 February 2020 (UTC)