User talk:Jiaodn/sandbox

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Nathan's Revisions
Longnat (talk) 00:22, 23 October 2019 (UTC)
 * Title is perfect
 * First sentence is a great intro
 * Great lead which shows the importance of her life
 * Although you used a quote at the end it is pretty useful to the article
 * The article is very clear to a non-expert
 * The article lets the reader decide for themselves
 * The article refrains from using the first person
 * The formatting is consistent with the rest of Wikipedia although I think the chart showing the article contents is usually after the lead
 * Everything is cited well
 * There are many article links but there is potential for a few more

Perce's revision
Your title is present. Your article states the topic in a single sentence. It summarizes all major points well. All the information in the beginning is stated in your body. The grammar, organization of the article, and transitions are appropriate and correct. The topic is covered correctly and the links are accurate. The tone of the article is neutral and does not favor one side of the point of views. The added images go well with the article.the citations and sources seem to be complete and correct. Since you wrote this new article, you do not have edits from a past article. Overall, the article is great. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pierce blalock (talk • contribs) 01:06, 24 October 2019 (UTC)

Angie's peer edit

 * The title is clear and simple.
 * The first sentence is direct and tells you what the article is about.
 * The lead is a summary of the article.
 * The article is clear to non-experts.
 * It is written in your own words and grammar free.
 * There is no persuasive language throughout the article.
 * Sources used in the article are reliable and cited in the article. Angelamikel (talk) 02:59, 25 October 2019 (UTC)