User talk:Jiazhen Lu/Poverty

I like the organization of your entry. By breaking things down into smaller sections, it makes things much easier for the reader to follow along and also seems to be easier if the reader is looking for a specific aspect within your topic. Referencing the census was a very good idea because this is a very trusted source. I do recommend moving the second paragraph farther down because you are referencing information from 2015-2016. If you push this information to the bottom, your entry will be in chronological order instead of jumping from the past to the present. Also, in the second to last paragraph you mention “there is a disturbing side” this phrase does not fit very well because it might make the reader think that this section is opinionated. Although this is a small change, I recommend replacing this with something more neutral toned. Overall, there seems to be a balanced coverage on the topic as well as all information being backed up with very reliable sources. As long as you make the adjustments previously stated I believe this article is very good overall. Bchurst (talk) 00:47, 3 December 2020 (UTC)