User talk:Jijungkim/sandbox

I enjoyed reading your article. The information you researched was straight-forward for the most part. The only thing I would include would be links to some words such as idiopathic for instance just in case a person needed to understand that particular word to fully grasp the material. The background inforamtion was vital really set the tone for your paper. Good work! 192.175.17.29 (talk) 02:34, 11 November 2015 (UTC)Danny Gibson

Your article is great and I really like your topic! Did you find anything about the life expectancy how is life with this disease? Also, I would use more external links because some words like “idiopathic” is very hard for who does not have scientific background. You made a good start and with very interesting information. Good job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Slopeslira (talk • contribs) 06:18, 13 November 2015 (UTC)